Trucks Posted February 13, 2006 Share Posted February 13, 2006 Hi im new to the forum (and new to writing music), so hello to everyone! I'd appreciate some feedback on some bits and bobs ive come up with, so if you have 5 mins spare why not give a listen This is a little folk instrumental thing ive been working on... ive changed key from D to E since recording this but you get the idea... http://www.amxconsultancy.co.uk/lee/sm58-folkthing-dry.mp3 This is a bluesy thing ive been working on.. Recorded thru a PC mic so the quality is a bit naff http://www.amxconsultancy.co.uk/lee/blank.mp3 Lyrics: 40lb weight, hanging over my head Girl of the world, rubbin down my back More shit gone wrong, than there ever once was I'd turn to your god, but my faiths done gone lost So brother! Where did you go? Said brother, I need to know! ..that same damn place my father gone Just up leave you, swimmin in the breeze Aint filled my hole, no pain been eased What can you tell me?, hey whatchu got? Turn to our god. But my faiths done gone lost So brother! Where did you go? Said brother, I needs to know! ..same damn place my father gone.. This is a kind of slow ballad type thing, ive not recorded the music for it yet but the lyrics are: (Intro) (Verse1) All this stuff runnin through my head Dont know why, i cant tell when S'not the same but nothings changed After all this time, the leaves gone dead? .. 5 years good an 1 gone bad 5-in-1's the best we coulda had Few years more is all i ask How much longer d'ya think it'll last (Chorus) Things dont need to be like this All I yurn is one more kiss Things dont need to be like that All that time we could still have (Verse2) All this stuff runnin through my head Nights been gone, a tear got shed First night apart, the time went on Things look tough, lets sort whats wrong .. 5 yrs good and 1 gone bad 5-in-1's the best we coulda had Few more yrs is worth a try Im so sorry for making you cry (Chorus) Things dont need to be like this All I yurn is just another kiss Things dont need to be like that All that time we could still have (Bridge) Dont come easy, if at all Plenty of people took that fall All the little demons in my hand Tellin me to bring it, to an end Theres a little angel in my heart Tells me not to take it, quite that far (Verse3) All this stuff runnin through my head Dont know why, i cant tell when I dont think i can let this rest After all this time, it must be said .. 5 years good an 1 gone bad 5-in-1's the best we coulda had Time aint up, not at all Not for the distance i did fall (Chorus) Things dont need to be like this Come here girl give your boy a kiss Things dont need to be like that Think i really love you thats a fact (Verse4) Had this stuff runnin through my head Feel much better now that was said Keepin you here in my life Maybe one day, you'll be my wife .. 5 years good an 1 gone bad 5-in-1's the best we coulda had .. .. (Extro) Ive just started on this, its pretty much in its infancy. Its going to have keyboards over it as well. Ive also got an acoustic only version of it that im working on that is played faster and alot more interestingly. It was recorded at 1 am (about an hour after i started coming up with it) with the mic just propped on the sofa so its a bit quiet. http://www.amxconsultancy.co.uk/lee/HmmmmTake1.mp3 http://www.amxconsultancy.co.uk/lee/HmmmmTake2.mp3 I have the full version recorded, but ill have to upload that when i get home. I would really appreciate some feedback, good or bad. Thanks again guys Soundclick Myspace Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eric VB Posted February 13, 2006 Share Posted February 13, 2006 Hey lee! Tried to give a listen, but all your links seem to be broken. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Trucks Posted February 13, 2006 Author Share Posted February 13, 2006 Hrrrmm yes.... they worked earlier Thats what you get for relying on friends for webhosting I guess Sorry about that, i'll post up new links shortly. Soundclick Myspace Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Trucks Posted February 13, 2006 Author Share Posted February 13, 2006 http://www.heavenlysecrets.co.uk/dump/sm58-folkthing-dry.mp3 http://www.heavenlysecrets.co.uk/dump/blank.mp3 I dont have the mp3's for Take1 & 2 here but here is Take 3 http://www.heavenlysecrets.co.uk/dump/Wet-HmmmmTake3.mp3 I got a bit carried away with the reverb on that one, and there are quit a few fudges throughout Soundclick Myspace Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eric VB Posted February 20, 2006 Share Posted February 20, 2006 Ok, lee, I'm finally getting some time to give this a listen. Downloading now, but give me a couple days. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Trucks Posted February 21, 2006 Author Share Posted February 21, 2006 That would be fantastic thanks Ric.. They arent much, but any feedback other than somebody shrugging at me sayin "its allright" would be great! When I ask people they normally tread extremely careully... and im like "look! just tell me what you really think"... Im never gonna get anywhere without decent feedback. I appreciate you giving me some of your time Thanks Soundclick Myspace Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Trucks Posted February 27, 2006 Author Share Posted February 27, 2006 I was having a jam with a friend the other day and he played a 3 chord progression he didnt know what to do with... anyway after a little mess around tonight I jazzed it up a bit. I think it would make a nice intro to a song... Ive named it Greenside for now http://www.heavenlysecrets.co.uk/dump/Greenside-Intro-Take1.mp3 I really like this for some reason... but im not sure where I could take it so i'd appreciate some ideas if anybody has any. Thanks Lee Soundclick Myspace Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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