shniggens Posted February 29, 2004 Share Posted February 29, 2004 The 2nd and last lines of this verse? Don't give up on life early It's a movie you watch 'til the end Mother gave you free admission We paid with the note you sent Is it wierd using past and present tense in the same verse/phrase? Hmmmmmm . . . Amateur Hack Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
shniggens Posted March 1, 2004 Author Share Posted March 1, 2004 Man, the topics in this forum are dying a slow, miserable death. Amateur Hack Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BeatleBass Posted March 1, 2004 Share Posted March 1, 2004 I don't see how it could be considered a rhyme Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
shniggens Posted March 2, 2004 Author Share Posted March 2, 2004 THe 2nd and 4th lines. 'End' and 'Sent'. Amateur Hack Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TaoManna Don Posted March 2, 2004 Share Posted March 2, 2004 Originally posted by shniggens: THe 2nd and 4th lines. 'End' and 'Sent'.Assonance: the vowels rhyme (make the same sound). Examples: great/lane, steam/scene It's a more subtle type of rhyme - a good substitute for worn-out "perfect rhymes." Satisfying and easy on the ear. Keep writing, Don Don Turner TaoManna Media Productions Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
cherri Posted March 2, 2004 Share Posted March 2, 2004 As Don said, it work just fine. Rhymes don't have to be exact. In "Moving On" I rhymed 'guitar' and 'more'. It's all in the delivery. One of our better songs (Ice Queen) doesn't even have a rhyme until the chorus. It ties together through rhythm and images. Cherri\'s tunes www.metalblues.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
theblue1 Posted March 13, 2004 Share Posted March 13, 2004 I'm with Don and Cherri... I often try to get as far away as possible -- who wants to have a pat rhyme? I come from a background of early 20th C poetry and it took me a while to get over my aversion to rhyming... but my experiments with unrhymed verse in songs were unrewarding. I also don't get obsessive about holding to a rhyme scheme if the song pulls me away or suggests a variation. All that said, we have things like rhyme schemes and metric patterns for reasons -- the mind likes order and likes discovering order in what at first seem like random events. bookmark these: news.google.com | m-w dictionary | wikipedia encyclopedia | Columbia Encyclopedia TK Major / one blue nine | myspace.com/onebluenine Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
martianrebel Posted March 13, 2004 Share Posted March 13, 2004 I hereby issue you with your own, official "POETIC LICENSE". Use it sparingly. *valid anywhere on Earth, but stay away from my planet -{m}- What's these knobs for? http://www.martianrebel.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jokerelli Posted March 15, 2004 Share Posted March 15, 2004 Why is everyone so concerned with rhyme? Only anal retentive music professors and music critics are gonna sit around and pan you if your song doesn't rhyme exactly. I say "screw rhyme", "screw worrying about past and present tense" etc. Just make sure it sounds good when it's sung. If it sounds good and you like it, that's all that counts. http://www.myspace.com/jokerelli Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
I I mjrn Posted March 20, 2004 Share Posted March 20, 2004 I'd have to agree that pop songs are really more about suggesting feelings or states of mind to listeners than about logically (p)layed out thought. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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