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I Got Rhythm by Gershwin

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I got rhythm

I got music

I got my girl

Who could ask for anything more?

 

This one doesn't rhyme too much

 

Don't Dream It's Over by Crowded House

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There is freedom within, there is freedom without

Try to catch the deluge in a paper cup

There's a battle ahead, many battles are lost

But you'll never see the end of the road

While you're travelling with me

 

Chorus

Hey now, hey now

Don't dream it's over

Hey now, hey now

When the world comes in

They come, they come

To build a wall between us

We know they won't win

 

Now I'm towing my car, there's a hole in the roof

My possessions are causing me suspicion but there's no proof

In the paper today tales of war and of waste

But you turn right over to the T.V. page

 

Hey now, hey now

Don't dream it's over

Hey now, hey now

When the world comes in

They come, they come

To build a wall between us

We know they won't win

 

Now I'm walking again to the beat of a drum

And I'm counting the steps to the door of your heart

Only the shadows ahead barely clearing the roof

Get to know the feeling of liberation and relief

 

Hey now, hey now

Don't dream it's over

Hey now, hey now

When the world comes in

They come, they come

To build a wall between us

Don't ever let them win

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The few places where there is rhyming (not including internal or spelling rhyme) are bold:

 

Hello.

Is there anybody in there?

Just nod if you can hear me.

Is there anyone home?

 

Come on, now.

I hear youre feeling down.

Well I can ease your pain,

Get you on your feet again.

 

Relax.

I need some information first.

Just the basic facts:

Can you show me where it hurts?

 

There is no pain, you are receding.

A distant ships smoke on the horizon.

You are only coming through in waves.

Your lips move but I cant hear what youre sayin.

When I was a child I had a fever.

My hands felt just like two balloons.

Now I got that feeling once again.

I cant explain, you would not understand.

This is not how I am.

I have become comfortably numb.

 

Ok.

Just a little pinprick. [ping]

Therell be no more --aaaaaahhhhh!

But you may feel a little sick.

 

Can you stand up?

I do believe its working. good.

Thatll keep you going for the show.

Come on its time to go.

 

There is no pain, you are receding.

A distant ships smoke on the horizon.

You are only coming through in waves.

Your lips move but I cant hear what youre sayin.

When I was a child I caught a fleeting glimpse,

Out of the corner of my eye.

I turned to look but it was gone.

I cannot put my finger on it now.

The child is grown, the dream is gone.

I have become comfortably numb.

"For instance" is not proof.

 

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Once there was this kid who

Got into an accident and couldn't come to school

But when he finally came back

His hair had turned from black into bright white

He said that it was from when

The car had smashed so hard

 

Mmm Mmm Mmm Mmm

Mmm Mmm Mmm Mmm

 

Once there was this girl who

Wouldn't go and change with the girls in the change room

But when they finally made her

They saw birthmarks all over her body

She couldn't quite explain it

They'd always just been there

 

Mmm Mmm Mmm Mmm

Mmm Mmm Mmm Mmm

 

But both girl and boy were glad

'Cause one kid had it worse than that

 

'Cause then there was this boy whose

Parents made him come directly home right after school

And when they went to their church

They shook and lurched all over the church floor

He couldn't quite explain it

They'd always just gone there

 

Mmm Mmm Mmm Mmm

Mmm Mmm Mmm Mmm

"For instance" is not proof.

 

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Pearl Jam- Jeremy

 

At home, drawing pictures of mountain tops, with him on top.

Lemon yellow sun. Arms raised in a v,

and the dead lay in pools of maroon below.

Daddy didn't give attention, oh,

to the fact that mommy didn't care.

King Jeremy the wicked, oh, ruled his world.

Jeremy spoke in class today.

Jeremy spoke in class today.

Clearly I remember pickin' on the boy,

seemed a harmless little fuck.

Ooo, but we unleashed a lion.

Gnashed his teeth and bit the recess lady's breast,

how could I forget?

And he hit me with a surprise left.

My jaw left hurtin', ooo, dropped wide open

just like the day, oh, like the day I heard:

Daddy didn't give affection, no,

and the boy was something that mommy wouldn't wear.

King jeremy the wicked, oh, ruled his world...

Jeremy spoke in class today.

Jeremy spoke in class today.

Jeremy spoke in class today.

Try to forget this...try to forget this...

Try to erase this...try to erase this...

from the blackboard...

Jeremy spoke in class today.

Jeremy spoke in class today.

Jeremy spoke in, spoke in...

Jeremy spoke in, spoke in...

Jeremy spoke in class today...

(spoke in, spoke in...)

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This and many more...

 

ME262 :

Goering's on the phone to Freiburg

Say's Willie's done quite a job

Hitler's on the phone from Berlin

Say's I'm gonna make you a star

 

My Captain Von Ondine, here's your next patrol

A flight of English bombers across the canal

After twelve, they'll all be here

I think you know the job

 

They hung there dependant from the sky

Like some heavy metal fruit

These bombers, ripened, ready to tilt

Must these Englishmen live that I might die

Must they live that I might die

 

In a G-load disaster from the rate of climb

Sometimes I'd faint and be lost to our side

But there's no reward for failure, but death

So watch me in the mirrors, keep in the glidepath

 

Get me through these radars, no I cannot fail

Not when great silver slugs are eager to feed

I can't fail, no not now

When twenty five bombers wait ripe

 

They hung there dependant from the sky

Like some heavy metal fruit

These bombers, ripened, ready to tilt

Must these Englishmen live that I might die

Must they live that I might die

 

Me-262 prince of turbojet, Junker's jommo 004

Blasts from clustered R4M quartets in my snout

And see these English planes go burn

Now you be my witness how red were the skies

When the fortresses flow, for the very last time

It was dark over Westphalia, in april of T45

 

They hung there dependant from the sky

Like some heavy metal fruit

These bombers, ripened, ready to tilt

Must these Englishmen live that I might die

Must they live that I might die

 

Must these Englishmen live that I might die

Junker.s jommo 004 (repeat many times)

Bombers at 12 o'clock high

 

ASTRONOMY: (actually there may be a rhyme in here)

The clock strikes twelve and moondrops burst

Out at you from their hiding place

Like acid and oil on a madman's face

His reason tends to fly away

 

Like lesser birds on the four winds

Like silver scrapes in May

Now the sands become a crust

And most of you have gone away

 

Come Susy dear, let's take a walk

Just out there upon the beach

I know you'll soon be married

And you want to know where the winds come from

 

Well it's never said at all

On the map that Carrie reads

Behind the clock back there you know

At the four winds bar

 

Hey, hey, hey, hey

Four winds at the four winds bar

Two doors locked and windows barred

One door let to take you in

The other one just mirrors it

Hey, hey, hey, hey

 

In hellish glare and inference

The other one's a duplicate

The queenly flux, eternal light

Or the light that never warms (repeat twice)

 

The clock strikes twelve and moondrops burst

Out at you from their hiding place

Miss Carrie nurse and Suzy dear

Would find themselves at the four winds bar

 

It's the nexus of the crisis

The origin of storms

Just the place to hopelessly

Encounter time and then came me

Hey, hey, hey, hey

 

Call me Desdenova, eternal light

These gravely digs of mine

Will surely prove a sight

And don't forget my dog, fixed and consequent

 

Astronomy...a star (repeat indefinitely)

Desdinova

"...I am the one you warned me of."

 

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theres lots of different ways to say stuff and even more ways to WRITE stuff.

 

some times when you are tellink a story one has NO NEED TO RHYME. yet rhymin' is PART OF WHY one "likes" a given tune when you don't quite know why you like it.

even being one of mine this is a good example which goes from no rhymes to lots of rhymes.

 

Words and music by arell Spencer

circa2003 may24th

 

I saw a beautiful girl

in the grocery store

Oh I was standin' in line

and I did'nt have much to say

when she looked me in the eye

and she gave me a little wink

 

Oh I met that beautiful girl

in the parkin' lot

oh we talked for a while

and she asked me if I'd go for a ride

so I give her a wink of my own

and I said why not

 

oh so we ambled over to her limo

man it had black leather seats

keith richards and the stones

was on the stereo

when she asked me

I told her it was neat

 

then she poured some pink champagne

she asked me I said I do not drink

she said not even water

I said water would be alright I think

water would be alright I think

I said water would be quite alright I think

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Randy Newman "My Life Is Good"

 

A couple of weeks ago

My wife and I

Took a little trip down to Mexico

Met this young girl there

We brought her back with us

Now she lives with us

In our home

She cleans the hallway

She cleans the stair

She cleans the livingroom

She wipes the baby's ass

She drives the kids to school

She does the laundry too

She wrote this song for me

Listen

Yeah

 

The other afternoon

My wife and I

Took a little ride into

Beverly Hills

Went to the private school

Our oldest child attends

Many famous people send their children there

This teacher says to us

"We have a problem here

This child just will not do

A thing I tell him to

And he's such a big old thing

He hurts the other children

All the games they play, he plays so rough

Hold it teacher

Wait a minute

Maybe my hears are clogged or somethin'

Maybe I'm not understanding

The English language

Dear, you don't seem to realize

 

My Life Is Good

My Life Is Good

My Life Is Good, you old bag

My Life, My Life

 

Just this evening

Some young associates of ours

Are flying to see us from

New York City

They're gonna stay with us

Oh, a couple of weeks or so

I'm gonna take 'em to

Restaurants and everything

Gonna get'em some

Real good cocaine

They don't get much

Where they come from

And this one's guy wife

Is such a pretty little brown thing

That I'm liable to give her a poke or two

Whaddaya think of that?

 

Teacher, let me tell you a little story

Just this morning

My wife and I

Went to this hotel in the hills

That's right

The Bel-Air Hotel

Where a very good friend of ours

Happens to be staying

And the name of this young man

Is Mr Bruce Springsteen

That's right, yeah

Oh, we talked about some kind of

woodblock or something

And this new guitar we like

And you know what he said to me

I'll tell you what he said to me

He said, "Rand, I'm tired

How would you like to be the Boss for awhile?"

Well, yeah

Blow, Big Man, blow

 

My Life Is Good

My Life Is Good

My Life Is Good

My Life, My Life Is Good

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Yeah, Randy Newman!

 

When She Loved Me (from Toy Story II)

 

When somebody loved me

everything was beautiful

every hour we spent together

lives within my heart

 

And when she was sad

I was there to dry her tears

and when she was happy so was I

when she loved me

 

Through the summer and the fall

we had each other that was all

just she and I together

like it was meant to be

 

And when she was lonely

I was there to comfort her

and I knew that she loved me

 

So the years went by

I stayed the same

but she began to drift away

I was left alone

still I waited for the day

when shed say

I will always love you

 

Lonely and forgotten

never thought shed look my way

and she smiled at me

and held me

just like she used to do

like she loved me

when she loved me

 

When somebody loved me

everything was beautiful

every hour we spent together

lives within my heart

 

When she loved me...

 

How about Kevin Gilbert's creation, Toy Matinee?

 

There Was A Little Boy

 

Verse 1

 

Mother's crazy but she runs the family.

Two older sisters and the boy who's nine years old

He's old enough to see the way it's going

Somewhere the birds are singing

But Mother's all alone

 

He needs a father but she takes a lover.

This man is not a friend, shows no friendship.

This man just waits around to play with sister.

But he plays too serious, he plays too rough.

 

Short Chorus

 

How can you expect a child to understand the sickness of the world whose eyes are blind?

The dying man inside this little boy is questioning his once upon a time.

 

Verse 2

 

He leaves home early for a loveless world.

And he find what he needs with an older boy.

He's got a couple things to hide from mother.

He hopes she'll understand, she hopes he'll change.

 

Chorus:

 

How can you expect a child to understand the sickness of the world whose eyes are blind?

A world he can't hope to conquer, insecurities that fester in his mind.

No choice, no fault and no way out, no blame, no guilt, no friends, no cure, no crime.

The dying man inside this little boy is questioning his once upon a time. (There was a little boy.)

 

Verse 3

 

This boy was once a strong man - but getting weaker.

He carries more than just the shame inside.

His mother stays away and faces nothing.

She blindly wishes for a happy ending.

 

Repeat Chorus

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Tracy Chapman's Fast Car. I dislike the song not because it has few rhymes but because it has no rhythmic sensibility; if she has six syllables to spit out and room for three, she spits them out anyway, ugh. Her other material (that I've heard) is not that way.

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Across The Universe

(Lennon/McCartney)

Words are flowing out like endless rain into a paper cup,

They slither while they pass, they slip away Across the Universe.

Pools of sorrow, waves of joy are drifting through my opened mind,

Possessing and caressing me.

Jai Guru Deva Om

Nothing's gonna change my world, Nothing's gonna change my world.

Nothing's gonna change my world, Nothing's gonna change my world.

 

Images of broken light which dance before me like a million eyes,

They call me on and on Across the Universe.

Thoughts meander like a restless wind inside a letter box,

They tumble blindly as they make their way Across the Universe

 

Jai Guru Deva Om

Nothing's gonna change my world, Nothing's gonna change my world.

Nothing's gonna change my world, Nothing's gonna change my world.

 

Sounds of laughter, shades of earth are ringing

Through my open ears inciting and inviting me.

Limitless, undying love, which shines around me like a million suns,

And calls me on and on Across the Universe

 

Jai Guru Deva Om

Nothing's gonna change my world, Nothing's gonna change my world.

Nothing's gonna change my world, Nothing's gonna change my world.

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Great call, zzzzzzzzzzzz! :thu:

 

Originally posted by Botch.:

Tracy Chapman's Fast Car. I dislike the song not because it has few rhymes but because it has no rhythmic sensibility; if she has six syllables to spit out and room for three, she spits them out anyway, ugh. Her other material (that I've heard) is not that way.

Ha! I really like that song, though I haven't heard much else from Ms. Chapman other than "Give One Reason To Stay Here". I believe she sings "Fast Car" that way for effect. It's a kind of conversational singing. Paul Simon does this sometimes, too. The beauty of it in "Fast Car" is that it illustrates the unstable, anxious life of the character in the song. It also adds to the emphasis when she sings "I--eee--I.." The lullabye groove of the music is the underlying bed of rhythm. At least that's what I hear and it's quite beautiful, IMO.

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I must say, I am baffled by some of your guys' selections in this thread. Not picking on you, Mark, but in bold are near rhymes I have identified in your song...

 

Originally posted by Mark Zeger:

Randy Newman "My Life Is Good"

 

A couple of weeks ago

My wife and I

Took a little trip down to Mexico

Met this young girl there

We brought her back with us

Now she lives with us

In our home

She cleans the hallway

She cleans the stair

She cleans the living room

She wipes the baby's ass

She drives the kids to school

She does the laundry too

She wrote this song for me

Listen

Yeah

 

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That's just the first part!

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LiveMusic-

 

I don't feel picked on. ;)

 

I read "song that does not rhyme" to mean a song with no logical rhyme scheme.

 

So while there are some words in "My Life Is Good" that rhyme eventually, I guess I didn't detect a pattern. Using "us" to end 2 consective lines isn't a rhyme. IMO, neither are "room", "school", and "too" (close, but not quite there).

 

But what do I know. YMMV.

 

Anyway, Neil picked a better example from the Randy Newman songbook. LOVE that song.

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Originally posted by tradivoro:

Moonlight in Vermont

Good one!

 

MOONLIGHT IN VERMONT

Written by John Blackburn & Karl Suessdorf

 

Pennies in a stream

Falling leaves, a sycamore

Moonlight in Vermont

 

Icy finger-waves

Ski trails on a mountainside

Snowlight in Vermont

 

Telegraph cables, they sing down the highway

And travel each bend in the road

People who meet in this romantic setting

Are so hypnotized by the lovely...

 

Ev'ning summer breeze

Warbling of a meadowlark

Moonlight in Vermont

 

 

Telegraph cables, how they sing down the highway

And they travel each bend in the road

People who meet in this romantic setting

Are so hypnotized by the lovely...

 

Ev'ning summer breeze

The warbling of a meadowlark

Moonlight in Vermont

You and I and Moonlight in Vermont

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I had never noticed that "Surrender" doesn't rhyme, but I always felt that there was something jarring about the lyrics. That's what it was- it really gets your attention. It's interesting how that's effective in different ways with some of these different songs: it makes the Pink Floyd sound conversational, while it gives the BOC songs a kind of prose storytelling feel. And it helps the Randy Newman songs sound so offbeat.
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Had to add it :D

 

Alice Cooper - The Song That Didn't Rhyme

 

Wrote a song, it was wrong from it`s very first conception

Seemed I struggled on every line

It wasn`t fast, wasn`t pretty, wasn`t serious or witty

The song that didn`t rhyme

The band couldn`t wing it, the singer couldn`t sing it

The Drummer's always out of time

The DJ`s were offended, my union card suspended

Billboard declared it a crime

The melody blows in a key that no one can find

The lyrics don`t flow but I can`t get it out of my mind

A three minute waste of your time

On a song that didn`t rhyme

It was bland, it was boring, all the groupies there were snoring

The first time we played it live

All the record guys got fired, the president retired

But somehow the song survived

The melody blows in a key that no one can find

The lyrics don`t flow but I can`t get it out of my mind

The melody blows in a key that no one can find

The lyrics don`t flow but I can`t get it out of my mind

A three minute waste of your time

No redeeming value of any kind

But thanks for the twelve ninety nine

On a song that didn`t rhyme

 

;)

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Originally posted by Jotown:

Three times a Lady by the Commodores (Lionel Ritchie)

He blew it. Last verse rhymes.

 

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Three Times a Lady

The Commodores/Lionel Richie

 

Thanks for the times that you've given me,

The memories are all in my mind.

And now that we've come to the end of our rainbow

There's something I must say out loud.

 

You're once, twice, three times a lady, and I love you.

Yes, you're once, twice, three times a lady,

And I love you

I love you.

 

When we are together the moments I cherish,

with every beat of my heart.

To touch you, to hold you, to feel you, to need you.

There's nothing to keep us apart.

 

You're once, twice, three times a lady, and I love you.

I love you.

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Snow Patrol's How To Be Dead (Big in the UK)

The only rhyme is an internal one in the last line... I love his song

 

 

Please take it easy

It can't all be my fault

I haven't made half the mistakes

That you've listed so far

Oh baby let me explain something

It's all down to drugs

At least I remember taking them

And not a lot else

It seems I've stepped over lines

You've drawn again and again

But if the ecstacy's in

The wit is definitely out

Dr. Jekyll is wrestling Hyde...

For my pride

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How about the verses of On Any Other Day by The Police? (Written by Stuart Copeland) ..with the exception of the first two lines. But it's used to specific effect. (rationalization. ;) )

 

On Any Other Day

 

There's a house on my street.

And it looks real neat.

I'm the chap who lives in it.

There's a tree on the sidewalk.

There's a car by the door.

I'll go for a ride in it.

And when the Wombat comes..

he will find me gone.

He'll look for a place to sit.

 

Chorus:

My wife has burned the scrambled eggs.

The dog just bit my leg.

My teenage daughter ran away.

My fine young son has turned out gay!?!

 

Pulled out the morning paper..

and spilled my tea.

(spoken:)Oh how could I do it?!?

(sung:)My wife is proud to tell me..

of her love affair.

(spoken:)Oh, how could she do this to me?!?

 

Chorus

 

And it would be ok on any other day.

And it would be ok on any other day.

(rinse and repeat...)

Better yet, how about some Paul Simon? This one rhymes long phrases, but rarely.

 

That Was Your Mother

 

A long time ago, yeah

Before you was born dude

When I was still single

And life was great

I held this job as a traveling salesman

That kept me moving from state to state

 

Well, I'm standing on the corner of Lafayette

State of Louisiana

Wondering where a city boy could go

To get a little conversation

Drink a little red wine

Catch a little bit of those Cajun girls

Dancing to Zydeco

 

Along come a young girl

She's pretty as a prayerbook

Sweet as an apple on Christmas day

I said good gracious can this be my luck

If that's my prayerbook

Lord let us pray

 

Well, I'm standing on the corner of Lafayette

State of Louisiana

Wondering where a city boy could go

To get her in a conversation

Drink a little red wine

Dance to the music of Clifton Chenier

The King of the Bayou

 

Well, that was your mother

And that was your father

Before you was born dude

When life was great

You are the burden of my generation

I sure do love you

But let's get that straight

 

Well, I'm standing on the corner of Lafayette

Arcoss the street from The Public

Heading down to the Lone Star Cafe

Maybe get a little conversation

Drink a little red wine

Standing in the shadow of Clifton Chenier

Dancing the night away

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