veldeman Posted January 18, 2011 Share Posted January 18, 2011 Rain rain go away rain rain go away I thought i told you yesterday i thought i told you yesterday To wash the pain away Oh, wash the pain away Rain rain come today and give me all i need to stay rain rain i need you here I need you now i can't escaaape I thought i told you yesterday i thought i said just yesterday To come again another day Make this pain just go away Rain rain go away Come again come again just come again some other day And rain rain wash this pain away. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
janealex Posted February 8, 2011 Share Posted February 8, 2011 Its good but its sounds like some kids are singing this poem. :S Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AnthonyCeseri Posted November 12, 2011 Share Posted November 12, 2011 Hey - Can I ask how come you repeated so many of those lines? I'm just wondering, because you would do that if you wanted emphasis on a certain line, but here you're doing it often, so that emphasis is getting lost. You might want to save that move for the line that begs of it the most. Just a thought... nice work! http://www.SuccessForYourSongs.com/ A Resource for Songwriters & Performers Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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