#942205 - 01/04/05 09:47 PM
Tsunami song 2 - Lyrics composition / discussion
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#942206 - 01/04/05 11:44 PM
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Last lyrics of record:
Verse 1:
When a world's undone
Your tired eyes cut through the pain toward a new tomorrow
Inside our strength fueled by the loss and the grip of sorrow
That seeds our heart
We must make a start
Right now here with you
I will make it true
For a world you've had and shall surely have once more
Chorus:
I'll help you up my friend
There's no way I'll stand by and not dig in
When you call I'm by your side
Together we'll work to rebuild a world for you
Verse 2:
A new beginning's come
Where your dreams take shape on a ???????? foundation
THrough the will and power of our true united nations (don't know about that reference)
Home is more than place
Strength is more than ???????
Hands are here for you
Lifting for the new
As a dawn breaks forth and we face the world together
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#942207 - 01/04/05 11:53 PM
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Verse 2:
A new beginning's come
Where your dreams take shape on a ?new/fresh? foundation
Through the will and power of our ?community of nations?
Home is more than place
Strength is more than ?ground/money?
Hands are here for you
Lifting for the new
As a dawn breaks forth and we face the world together
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#942209 - 01/05/05 02:02 AM
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Christopher Robin
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How about "family of nations"?
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#942210 - 01/05/05 02:36 AM
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Hey Shoes:
Nice work. I don't think we need a 3rd verse...check the music thread about the arrangement. The 3rd verse will be all instrumental!
Dave
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#942211 - 01/05/05 02:37 AM
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Family is good. Closer in meaning than community and most importantly.. one less syllable!
Another verse.. needs help though..
A challenge to be won
We'll prove our courage and determination to see it through
Conquer all that stands in our way to be there with you
We will forge ahead
????????????????????
Woman, child and man
Arm in arm we'll stand
You're not alone in this fight while we've got so much to give
While I can sing this in my head... I'd need more than Viagra in the shower to crank this out. Somebody mentioned Peter Gabriel.. This plays in my head like Red Rain is pounding on it and I can only imagine that kind of range. (mind you he brutalizes it.. but it's with Style!)
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#942212 - 01/06/05 03:44 PM
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Ya know, the defining lyric for this song, for me anyway, is this:
There's no way I can stand by you and not dig in
That one lyric, to me, brings forth the image of getting your hands dirty if necessary to help our fellow human beings in a time of need. I'm having difficulty putting into words the emotion this lyric causes me to feel. (OK, enough sappiness, Dave...)
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#942213 - 01/07/05 01:32 AM
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We need a title for song #2. We've been referring to it as "Rebuild". How about formally naming it "Rebuild a World"? That's the lyric at the end of the chorus, and it's "sticky" for me...thoughts?
Dave
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#942214 - 01/07/05 01:35 AM
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"Dig In"
"The World Together" (I've always been a fan of songs where the title appears only once, sort of like an afterthought in the lyrics)
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#942215 - 01/07/05 02:04 AM
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Originally posted by offramp:
"Dig In"
"The World Together" (I've always been a fan of songs where the title appears only once, sort of like an afterthought in the lyrics)  Ok, I need to go to bed...I'm starting to get stupid-tired!
Dave
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#942216 - 01/08/05 03:01 AM
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I don't mind Dig-In either except it does have some macabre connotations given the number of people who were buried and are now being buried....
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#942217 - 01/08/05 05:27 AM
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Originally posted by nursers:
I don't mind Dig-In either except it does have some macabre connotations given the number of people who were buried and are now being buried....
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#942218 - 01/09/05 07:48 PM
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That thought crossed my mind the moment I wrote it down. Anything ti do with digging, excavating or the like reminded me of mass graves and that was just too much to envision.
It simply hard more force than "pitch" and better feel that "help out" which sounded firkin' lame.
pitch is maybe better but I have a grade school dictionary and a limited grasp on the english language.
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#942219 - 01/09/05 10:33 PM
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Y'know, in context it doesn't bother me that much. To me it evoked an image of digging out, which is what's going on anyway.
Still, if it's too macabre then how about:
I'll help you up my friend
There's no way I'll stand by and not step in
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