Without the vid, it is hard to associate the mix to its purpose. But, what I feel it lacks is any kind of .... captivation... The composition is good, don't get me wrong. But for instance, you have the drums buried quite deep, I would assume that the music is leading up to something... So maybe slowly increase the volume/intenstity to the point where you want the audience to feel the BAM. So the music carries on, and the drums slowly build intensity.. as in a crescendo.
This is an uneducated critique.  Just my 2cents.
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