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I would like your opinion on the lyrics of this song #2633774 10/16/14 02:18 AM
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Re: I would like your opinion on the lyrics of this song [Re: Nashy] #2634296 10/18/14 08:27 AM
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Hi Nashy
Well just my take-the words fit well within the song. There are a few rushed parts to fit the rhythm but mostly it sounds well phrased.
On the other hand it sounds kind of chatty and cliched-many many writers start out this way. Keep writing and you will find YOUR voice, not phrases from somewhere else. Of course using set phrases is perfectly okay as a kind of diving board. But you are the pool, the listener wants to hear something new. Anyway good luck.


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Re: I would like your opinion on the lyrics of this song [Re: skipclone 1] #2881933 09/27/17 07:04 PM
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Hi...I like the song. The only suggestion I might have is to dumb down certain words. For example, you used the word "seldom" which sounds intelligent but not as musical. Maybe replace with, I'm never at a loss for words. There are a few more words that sound a little too intelligent in the song. If you need assistance with this, just let me know. I wriote songs professionally and cane help.

Charles


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