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#2633774 - 10/15/14 10:18 PM I would like your opinion on the lyrics of this song
Nashy Offline
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#2634296 - 10/18/14 04:27 AM Re: I would like your opinion on the lyrics of this song [Re: Nashy]
skipclone 1 Offline
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Hi Nashy
Well just my take-the words fit well within the song. There are a few rushed parts to fit the rhythm but mostly it sounds well phrased.
On the other hand it sounds kind of chatty and cliched-many many writers start out this way. Keep writing and you will find YOUR voice, not phrases from somewhere else. Of course using set phrases is perfectly okay as a kind of diving board. But you are the pool, the listener wants to hear something new. Anyway good luck.
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