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#2361058 - 11/26/11 03:03 PM post your music for honest feedback
Phil W Offline
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OK, I'll start.
And I don't have any problem with criticism.

I improvised this tune a few years back and I've never played it again. Do you think it has enough going for it to re-learn or arrange it for a band or is it best left as it is? Or does it suck?

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#2361069 - 11/26/11 04:13 PM Re: post your music for honest feedback [Re: Phil W]
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Does it suck? Actually no, I liked it. That bass sounds really nice. The only thing I can point out is that there were a couple of fast runs near the end that lost the mood for me but the long notes with that great "mwah" tone brought me back in.
Nice work!


Edited by b5pilot (11/26/11 04:14 PM)
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#2361070 - 11/26/11 04:17 PM Re: post your music for honest feedback [Re: b5pilot]
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#2361093 - 11/26/11 06:18 PM Re: post your music for honest feedback [Re: Griffinator]
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that is worth re-learning and rearranging. my most recent work is in my signature. what y'all think?
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#2361099 - 11/26/11 06:35 PM Re: post your music for honest feedback [Re: rumpelstiltskin.]
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I dug it. As is, it's a nice piece of incidental music but it could go in a few different places. I can hear other instruments if that's what you decided to do.

Critique? The intonation in a few places could be cleaned up if you wanted to present it in a professional setting. And if it were to be a track on the record, it could use a bridge or B section. It's a bit long to be on one theme. But the vibe is nice. It evokes an after hours point downtown.
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#2361101 - 11/26/11 06:40 PM Re: post your music for honest feedback [Re: rumpelstiltskin.]
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Originally Posted By: rumpelstiltskin.
that is worth re-learning and rearranging. my most recent work is in my signature. what y'all think?


That sounded good too. The performances are good. The recorded had a bit of a "bareness" to it. The drums were very dry -- both in feel and in sound. They could have used some reverb and a little more finesse. I think the hook could have been made stronger with a harmony on "We are overjoyed" and I would have gotten to it a little sooner and repeated it once more -- even fading out on it. If you have a hook, you have a song. It comes down to arrangement and production.
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#2361241 - 11/27/11 10:12 AM Re: post your music for honest feedback [Re: rumpelstiltskin.]
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Originally Posted By: rumpelstiltskin.
that is worth re-learning and rearranging. my most recent work is in my signature. what y'all think?


I liked it. I agree with plangent that the drums (mainly the snair) was a bit too dry. The singer has a great voice and if she could have dubbed in a harmony above her vocal in the chorus that would have made quite an impact for me.
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#2361273 - 11/27/11 11:59 AM Re: post your music for honest feedback [Re: b5pilot]
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Thanks guys, real helpful ideas.

Rumpelstiltskin.

Dig the simplicity and the fills in the bass. The offbeat (bridge) thing I would have played against it in the bass with heavy downbeats rather than going with it which would have created more tension - but that's just me. I like tension.

Enjoyed the song a lot - and agree about the snare sound. The cut out at the end is very effective.
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#2361460 - 11/28/11 06:24 AM Re: post your music for honest feedback [Re: Phil W]
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i think my playing in the bridge wasn't very confident. (it doesn't sound very confident to me.) perhaps sticking with a more downbeat feel would have cleaned that up. thanks!
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#2361476 - 11/28/11 07:05 AM Re: post your music for honest feedback [Re: rumpelstiltskin.]
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Yeah...a sparse downbeat feel against the busy offbeat line the others are playing
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#2361715 - 11/28/11 06:41 PM Re: post your music for honest feedback [Re: Phil W]
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Here goes! I've had the good fortune to be playing wiht a pretty cool duo called Starnes & Shah for close to the past 2 years. Over the summer we went into the recording studio to record Red Brick Tide. Sorry, I don't have full song samples available for listening at this time.
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#2361802 - 11/29/11 04:50 AM Re: post your music for honest feedback [Re: Nicklab]
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this topic is now stickied. it will always be on the top of the forum. if you post your music in a separate thread, it will be moved/deleted. if that behavior is persistent, you will receive a very terse PM. wink
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#2361803 - 11/29/11 04:51 AM Re: post your music for honest feedback [Re: rumpelstiltskin.]
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Originally Posted By: rumpelstiltskin.
this topic is now stickied. it will always be on the top of the forum. if you post your music in a separate thread, it will be moved/deleted. if that behavior is persistent, you will receive a very terse PM. wink


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#2361807 - 11/29/11 05:15 AM Re: post your music for honest feedback [Re: Griffinator]
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#2361992 - 11/29/11 12:54 PM Re: post your music for honest feedback [Re: Ross Brown]
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Where's the sticky for dishonest feedback?

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#2362261 - 11/30/11 07:29 AM Re: post your music for honest feedback [Re: jeremy c]
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Where's the sticky for dishonest feedback?

"that was great, man! keep up the good work."


grin I should post something!
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#2362263 - 11/30/11 07:34 AM Re: post your music for honest feedback [Re: lug]
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i'm a putz.


Edited by rumpelstiltskin. (12/01/11 08:06 AM)
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#2362269 - 11/30/11 07:44 AM Re: post your music for honest feedback [Re: kenfxj]
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Bump.


Now THAT is funny! grin
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#2363323 - 12/02/11 04:17 PM Re: post your music for honest feedback [Re: lug]
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Originally Posted By: Stormageddon
Bump.


Now THAT is funny! grin

Apparently a certain mod who shall remain nameless (it's robb) doesn't appreciate my rather sophisticated sense of humor.
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#2363906 - 12/05/11 01:04 PM Re: post your music for honest feedback [Re: Nicklab]
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Originally Posted By: Nicklab
Here goes! I've had the good fortune to be playing wiht a pretty cool duo called Starnes & Shah for close to the past 2 years. Over the summer we went into the recording studio to record Red Brick Tide. Sorry, I don't have full song samples available for listening at this time.


Very together sounding stuff Nick, and the bass is just right - spot on in fact. The bass sits nicely in the mix. Some catchy tunes too! I like the melodic twist/longer line on Think Twice best.
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#2364112 - 12/06/11 09:55 AM Re: post your music for honest feedback [Re: Phil W]
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O.K., I'll play.

song 1
This was recorded about 25 years ago. I wrote the music and lyrics. The other musicians are all friends. I gave them sheet music and it was recorded in one or two takes.

song 2
It's a very popular Israeli. I play with this band from time to time.
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#2365225 - 12/09/11 11:43 AM Re: post your music for honest feedback [Re: jeremy c]
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JC, OG: Song 1 - great, funky groove - great arrangement,

Song 2: allowed the rhythm some room to grow, supported the vocal well, I would have preferred more bass in the mix and would have added more momentum with slides and passing tones but your line helped it build well without bludgeoning the rhythm.
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#2365289 - 12/09/11 02:07 PM Re: post your music for honest feedback [Re: Phil W]
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OK - I did a session a few years back. Originally, this was recorded as a country-style song. The songwriter wanted to do it in a more CCR (Contemporary Christian radio) vein.
I used a Lull M4 (Fralin pups) with the active circuit by-passed.

Back story - I got a call from Terry Brock (toured/recorded with Kansas). We had worked together a few times at Margaritaville/Key West and he had a friend who was a producer/engineer who needed to borrow a bass for a track that he had inadvertently erased the bass track from. We happened to live close by, I brought over some basses for him to try out and he offered me the chance to do some work for him in return.

I can't post music tracks, but this was used on another forum where they posted it. Click the link and go to post #11 and click on "I Believe" in the post.
#11 "I Believe"

Looking forward to your insights. Caveat - the producer loves compression.
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#2365372 - 12/09/11 08:58 PM Re: post your music for honest feedback [Re: JBFLA]
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I listened to Jeremy Song 2 - I agree with Phil that the bass needs to be more up front. sounded good - supportive.

JBFLA - like the up-front-ness of the mix. Again, very supportive and rooted. I like the bit of "warble" at the end. It would have been OK with me if you experimented more for the repeated refrains at the end, but I'm guessing they liked your steady, solid play here.

Will try to find something I can post....

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#2365462 - 12/10/11 08:42 AM Re: post your music for honest feedback [Re: Tom Capasso]
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Originally Posted By: Tom Capasso
...I like the bit of "warble" at the end. It would have been OK with me if you experimented more for the repeated refrains at the end, but I'm guessing they liked your steady, solid play here...
Tom

That's funny Tom, that is exactly what the engineer wanted. We went back and redid a couple of spots at the end... kinda caught me off-guard.
The song was originally country, but they wanted to change it. He sent me a new file with nothing but a scratch vocal, piano and drum machine track. That's what I worked on. When I got there everything you hear (except the bass) was on there and I had to rethink my bass part - was way to busy for what had already been done. I think maybe I went too far the other way.
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#2365743 - 12/11/11 02:22 PM Re: post your music for honest feedback [Re: JBFLA]
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A couple of 'sketches' I clobbered together while up in Scotland for a few days. There was a hurricane blowing through (peak gust = 165mph!) so I kept my head down that night & popped these onto the Fostex.

They are not perfect, some inaccuracies, but just working out an idea or two.

I don't usually play slide & I forgot to bring a plectrum (pick to you transatlantic guys) so I played lead in 'All Right By Me' using my fingers & improvised the solo.

I used a plastic paper clip in 'Straw In Your Hair' and I don't usually play slide, but it seemed right for this. I didn't mean to leave 36 in the middle, but suffered a 'Zen' moment listening to my own music & missed the 'in'(!!!).

Fostex MX8 fed through a Digitech Genesis 1. Yamaha G5A bass with RBX365 pickups. Custom Strat with DiMarzio TDS1s bridge & neck with a Levenson Blade centre pickup. EV microphone.

(Can't I embed Soundcloud here?)

I've added these to my Soundcloud & Soundclick accounts. Have to say I think the sound quality is better with Soundclick - headphones desireable here.

http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=11283092

http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=11283098

http://soundcloud.com/geoffbyrne/allright-1

http://soundcloud.com/geoffbyrne/hair-1

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#2366115 - 12/12/11 04:36 PM Re: post your music for honest feedback [Re: The Geoff]
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Geoff -

It's tough to post a critique on these efforts without calling up a reference to someone else.

That said - I enjoyed "Allright 1". Laid back, but edgy in a Dire Straits sorta way. That's a good thing in my mind.

Comparison? - Sort of a (mellow) Billy Idol and Mark Knopfler collaboration.

I don't think you'd find that combination in "real life", so that's a winner in my mind.
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#2366227 - 12/13/11 01:45 AM Re: post your music for honest feedback [Re: JBFLA]
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I realised it was Dire Staits-ish when I put it down. I've been listening to 'The Rag Picker's Dream' recently & it's obviously influenced me.

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#2366732 - 12/14/11 12:14 PM Re: post your music for honest feedback [Re: The Geoff]
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#2367121 - 12/15/11 02:09 PM Re: post your music for honest feedback [Re: Lefty Bass]
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Interesting. It doesn't sound like anything else and that's a very good thing.
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