All input are very welcome!
The song is named "For Absent Friends" written, performed and produced by yours truly.

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page_songInfo.cfm?bandID=852185&songID=6855444

At first, I though I would not like the song, but as you built on the opening and added a bit more instrumentation, I was drawn into it. Similar to late period Pink Floyd, but less dramatic.
Good job.

Thanks! I agree that it starts a bit "boring". I'm thinking a short, mood-setting guitarsolo to start of the song, before the vox kicks in. Could that be a good idea?

This is just my opinion after a second listen, but the song starts getting interesting when the instruments are added to the guitar and vox intro, colors added to the base layer, if you will. Instead of a guitar solo, you might consider a little fretless bass tone under the intro sounds of kids playing, it's colorful but not intrusive. I recommend making the sounds of the kids playing just a little longer; by the time I realized that the sounds at the beginning were kids voices, the guitar and lyrics were already started, the shift is a bit too abrupt. I'd only make the intro 4 or so bars longer, I think the length of the song is about right overall.

I think that the intro sounds of the kids playing sets the framework of the song, good tie in.

Aagain, just my opinion. Stick with it, I think it's a good song

Ok, new mix:

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page_songInfo.cfm?bandID=852185&songID=6855444

Added some wierd synth and Ebow at the beginning. Did som mixing adjustments too.
Hope you'll like it!